Baseball Haiku

Play ball! Then talk about it. Or vice versa.
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Southpaw Slim
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Post by Southpaw Slim »

Thanks for the clarification and re-explanation. I'll give it a go.
I intended to write something to remind everybody of my superior prowess.
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nick is a big tool
seven syllables? passé!
paul is always right


See what happens when you try to adhere to 5-7-5? Not pretty.
I meant to put something here that reminded everyone that this forum exists
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Oh, and...

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...you guys are familiar with Bad Haiku, right?

Here's one of my old submissions.
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Sunday's slow approach
Clear skies and new cleats
eager for more baseball



p.s. all signs point to my attendance this week.
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Good one Ken, notice how he got a nature phrase, and an emotive phrase in there? Very good.
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Saturday Labor
Warm and Sunny Tomorrow
Freedom of the Soul
Mr. Mcgee don't make me angry...you wouldn't like me when I'm angry!!!
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Sometimes I wonder,
"Will we view tomorrow's skies
clearly or through rain?"
I intended to write something to remind everybody of my superior prowess.
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The batter steps in
Weary from the summer sun
His focus is within
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A single misstep
Tears from a frustrated man
Soil soaked at his feet
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Post by tallguy »

Good stuff guys. I like the second one from Nick in particular.
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poetry is dumb
but baseball inspires
so proudly i write
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And your first one was actually quite good. For shame.
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Post by TheLegend »

paul, your mom
gives great head
hooray!


p.s. these last two were spawned out of complete boredom (and lack of desire to actually write) i promise the next one will be good.

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A foolish man jests
Mocking the skill of aged tongues
But his mom is best
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